https://www.flickr.com/photos/39747297@N05/5230479916/in/photolist-8Yczsd-cbcCk3-7jNmHv-dipm3P-5FefTX-sKjX3-5Fixk1-bBUjs2-bCwEoZ-4qLmk2-ccHti1-bUswQr-2Nati-eALvw3-5bjaoE-dULRxt-boZz85-daMjCh-5FivxU-nfWQif-bEU9xB-evy1D8-78WDg-3f6kZz-bQ7zsp-5FefXP-ddus1V-dwHLRn-5FiwF3-3Ao8mS-9NCMZT-5EYCfm-cpXBxm-e48NRC-8h9176-bBUupB-jvie5t-jjWWL7-2BS8QV-2pvf6Z-4ZHLs3-5WnYcr-422k5w-63dWbv-fbyEfd-oJsYJa-bxN9YA-fSNt1b-dURTpS-3AEivQ

SAC Challenge Week 2: “Choose”

I’ve started work on this week’s challenge from Rob Wells.  It’s a doozy for a songwriter like me who has been targeting middle-aged listeners with lyrics that deal with the complexity of relationships later in life.

Rob wants us to write an explosive pop hit aimed at a much younger audience with a female vocalist in mind, so I’ve spent time on Songza listening to selections from the “Teen Pop” genre.  It’s such formulaic music but it’s impressive for how the songwriters can come up such interesting hooks and themes within such tight constraints.

I noticed quite a few songs are simple one-word titles, like “Shower” or “Bright” or “Style“.  It’s always interesting leading up to the chorus to discover what approach the songwriter has taken with the word.  “Shower” by Becky G., for instance, is a smitten girl so happy about the guy that she’s sings in the shower when she thinks about him.  It’s a great image and one that will resonate with the audience.

For my part, I’m going with the flow.  A one-word title: “Choose”  as in “choose me.”  It won’t win any Grammys but it’s a start.  And I’ve got a draft chorus for it too based on a series of rhyming couplets:

Baby, it’s time to choose me-
you don’t want to lose me
not this time around

Our love is strong-
but if you wait too long-
I’ll be gone before you know it

You can make your move-
you know I’ll approve
I’ll love you over and over again

I can’t wait forever-
to be together
you don’t want to lose me-
it’s time to choose.

It’s simple but if I can come up with a decent melody and hook, then it might work as a chorus.  The verses will need to add detail and colour but I’m thinking it needs to revolve around the theme of choice.  Maybe something along the lines of having so many choices to make, or something like that.  Any ideas, suggestions for my list of choices, are all welcome!

It turns out (of course) that David Guetta has a song of the same title which actually takes an opposite perspective to the lyrics I’ve written.  I could imagine the two songs setting up a counterpoint between two opposing perspectives.

Reflecting on SAC Challenge Week 1

The SAC Challenge opened with Matt Dusk’s pitch request.  I have to confess that it’s outside the style of writing I’ve been cultivating for the past year and therefore a bit out of my comfort zone.  I have listened to the reference tracks he offered and I began to play around with a title idea, with great input from some other songwriters participating in the challenge.

“Beautiful Freeze” is full of possibilities but if I’m going to develop it, I need to find a musical angle for it.  I’ve got the seed of an idea but not quite ready to record and share it yet.  I usually write with guitar, so working with piano puts me in a different zone, both musically and technically (i.e., not a strength).  However, I like the “icy” quality of a simple piano track and I’m playing with the chord progression

C … Csus4/F …  Am7 … G

C … Csus4/F … Gsus4 … C

And I’m going down tempo rather than up.  I’m working with the a phrase “Like the frost in the trees/it’s a beautiful freeze”. The image and phrasing needs to be stronger but I have to start somewhere.

I’m going to sit with it as the challenge continues and see where it might go.  I’m started to explore some collaborations with it too but that’s a challenge too when working online.  I hope to be able to continue to work on that as well.

 

SAC Challenge: developing “Beautiful Freeze”

Thanks to Jenny Sjolund for her suggestion in my previous post about working with song titles.  I offered the title “Beautiful Freeze”.

She pointed out we could take it in an ironic direction by suggesting a break up.  Instead of strobe light on a dance floor “freezing” her/his face at a moment in time, it’s a flash of lightning during a thunderstorm.

The couple is fighting during a storm and a break up is imminent.  But for that split moment, s/he sees a beautiful person that they fell in love with.  It’s tragic.  Thunderstorms are beautiful and dangerous at the same time.  Wind, rain, thunder.

Freeze is an ironic juxtaposition with the heat of summer and suggests love going cold in the middle of a heat wave.  There are plenty of emotional layers and images here to work with.

Could it work up tempo?  Or is it more down tempo?

Or, we just stick to a winter theme…

SAC Challenge: Object Writing

I’ve started object writing in the mornings as part of my routine during the Challenge.   This is Pat Pattison’s standby technique for developing writing that emphasizes sensuality (i.e., connecting to the senses).  Pattison is a well-known songwriting instructor at Berklee College of Music in Boston.  Among his most biggest champions is former student John Mayer.  By any measure, that’s a pretty good endorsement!

At five minutes a day, it’s amazing how the object writing exercise helps focus and hone my imagination.

Here’s a primer on object writing.  It’s also a good (and fast) way to generate more in-depth ideas for a song concept in early development, and move away from the most obvious stuff that comes to mind.

Working with a title

I’m playing with the phrase “Beautiful Freeze” as a possible title.  Check out this post on SAC about writing from titles.

I’ve done it before with my song “Two Nights in Toledo”, which I documented here in detail.  Maybe too much detail.

Anyway, what I love about titles is that they can go so many directions, especially if you resist the temptation to take the first idea that comes to mind.  Set that one aside and work to generate some other, less obvious themes.

I often search Flickr for visual images to help me imagine an idea.  Here’s something that comes up when I search for “Beautiful Freeze”

https://www.flickr.com/photos/26327184@N07/4492268156/in/photolist-9haCm8-9eBxpv-9hdvFU-9eBxpF-9eBxpB-7QUL6R-9hdvFG-9haCkP-4ED5rC-9haCke-9haCkv-9hdvFY-9haCkk-9eBxpM-9haCkV-9hdvFS-7QY2EQ-7QY3Pf-7QY4a3-7QULsR-pAsU8N-pSNbpg-acAunH-ndRTYm-4hDPgF-acAunt-ny2xPx-by2FzZ-9gw4e2-9fwCdr-k6FehL-dMDmEa-9pRMCk-9fwCPK-9fzKkA-dTUAhR-dmEuUb-5pzn1p-99nLPP-dYpByY-pJtycE-aNweDD-aNweDP-AGH4R-5Yx1G4-5RxQ3m-9fzEHw-iH33rb-5TWCYe-9fzDso

A moment frozen in time.  Both the photo and the ice can “freeze” a moment.  This makes me think about cameras and flashbulbs, strobes.  Maybe beautiful freeze is a moment on the dance floor when the girl (or boy) is “frozen” by the strobe light?  Captured for an instant in the midst of the music and the flow of everything.  You want to hold on to it, but it’s gone just as quick.

Maybe we have a premise for a song here… any takers?

 

 

 

SAC Challenge 2015

Okay, the SAC Challenge kicked off today with what looks like 110 or so songwriters on the Facebook site.  Six weeks of focussed writing.  It should be interesting. Matt Dusk has opened the challenge with a pitch request.  He’s a crooner by trade but wants to expand things for his new record.  He says he likes a lot groove based things and “to get the excitement of the band and the audience all together.” The stuff that really works for him includes Rock Mafia’s “The Big Bang“,  “Pumped up Kicks” by Foster the People, the cool groove of “Get Lucky” by Daft Punk.  OR, we can take it down tempo, like “All of Me” by John Legend or Lana Del Rey. Not only is that quite a wide range to work with, it could encompass quite different approaches to writing itself.  Jason Blume writes about some of these differences, noting that

In pop, urban, hip-hop, and dance music, a musical backing track is typically created first. This track (sometimes called the musical bed) consists of the accompaniment—the chord progressions and all instrumentation, such as the keyboard, bass, guitar, and percussion parts—but it does not include a melody or lyric for the vocalist to sing. The melody and lyric that is sung “on top” of the music track is referred to as the topline. … In many cases, the musical track is sent to a topliner who writes the melody and lyric long-distance. 

Contrast that with folk or roots music where, according to Blume,

… songs typically evolve organically as writers strum guitars or play keyboards while composing melodies and lyrics. In Nashville, the majority of successful songs are the result of collaborations, but unlike some other genres, cowriters are typically in the same room, with all writers contributing to both the melody and the lyric. 

Perhaps the medium is the method? In any case, I don’t think the next step in the process has been set out for us yet.  It’s just been Matt’s pitch request.   But perhaps writing method is one of the considerations as we go forward with the Challenge.  Try experimenting with both techniques and see what happens. I’m more of the organic type of songwriter but it would be interesting to try my hand as a topliner.

Actually, I’ve done it a couple times for fun, like this song “Bumpercars” I wrote for my young son a few years ago.  It’s a canned Garageband track but I added the topline to it.  Ha!  I never thought I’d rap a song, but hey I’ll do almost anything for my kid 🙂

Anyone have a music bed to share?  Want to try a collaboration?

Simplicity in design … or is it?

The La’s song “There she goes” is a good example of simplicity in songwriting across the four dimensions of lyric, melody, harmony, and rhythm.  However, what seems simple at first hearing can be surprisingly subtle and, on closer inspection, harbour a few surprises for the astute listener.

This version comes in at 2:47, performed on this recording at about 120bpm.

Released first in 1988 then again in 1990, the story is a boy wants girl theme set in a repeating pattern that uses a single rhyme scheme that flows from the first line, “there she goes again”.  Subsequent lines end with rhyming words “brain”, “contain,” “remains”, etc.

The harmony is the widely used G/D/C progression, followed by an Am/G/C with the minor chord giving it a bit of moodiness.

The first line of the melody is two half notes and whole note: “there/she/goes” singing on the 5th, 3rd, and 5th of the harmony chords.  So, he’s singing D/F#/G. Giving it a nice open feel.  Actually, the melodic line in this phrase is similar to “When the Saints Go Marching In” which might resonate subconsciously with some listeners.  I don’t know … maybe.

The second line changes the rhythm with a quarter notes “there/she/goes” with again picking up the last downbeat beat in the bar and carrying over into the next measure. The third lyric phrase is similar

Then it moves to the Am/G/C progression with the line “And I just can’t contain/this feeling that remains”, repeating it, then turning around on the D to start the cycle all over.

Altough it’s a simple design overall, the song structure is unusual because it isn’t based on the usual 4/8/16 bar sections, opting instead for odd numbered sections:

12+1 bar intro
11 bar verse
11 bar verse
11 bar instrumental (same as verse)
12 bar bridge
11 bar verse
7 bar outro

The unusual structure stems from a five line verse followed by a one measure turnaround.  The line phrasing is a typical 2 measures but the verse itself is five lines:

G       D    C
There she goes- (2 measures)

G              D        C
There she goes again
(2 measures)

G         D               C
Racing through my brain
(2 measures)

       Am    G     C
And I just can’t contain
(2 measures)

        Am     G    C
This feeling that remains
(2 measures)

turnaround on D (1 measure)

In terms of production, the song may sound relatively simple but it uses a number of devices to develop an arc and keep it fresh:

  • the guitar intro is a motif that is repeated throughout and reappears in the instrumental section and again in the the bridge section;
  • the vocal part is solo in the first verse but additional backup parts are added in subsequent verses;
  • the shift in the vocal styling from falsetto to full voice in the second half of the verse adds character and “body language” to the delivery;
  • the bridge is a simple but effective variation on the verse, with a slight dip in the dynamic at the beginning to add some mood.

The Wikipedia entry for the song provides some additional background and context for the song, including an interesting note that seems to suggest that it took the magic touch of producer Steve Lillywhite to transform the original recording into a hit record.  The song was covered by Sixpence None the Richer in a 1999 release.  How do they compare?  Listen for yourself.

Two Nights in Toledo

One aspect of songwriting that I enjoy the most is the element of surprise. There is a thrill that comes from not quite knowing where an idea might go as it develops from a song seed into a finished result. It’s a bit like a write-your-own-adventure story without the ability to skip to the ending!

One of my approaches to writing lyrics is to simply to play guitar and let words come out of my mouth. I record multiple takes and listen. It’s a bit like stream of consciousness writing because during these sessions I’ll just sing stuff. Much of it is nonsense but every now and then an interesting expression comes out and becomes the basis for a lyric.

Yet, and more often than not, I’ll sing or mumble something that makes me think of something totally unrelated. I now realize that this is less like stream of consciousness and more like one of those inkblot tests where the blob lifts an idea or image from out of the realms of the subconscious.

Songwriting, as many have noted, is only 20% inspiration. The 80% perspiration part comes from thinking and listening, trying and testing ideas over and over until something clicks. “Two Nights in Toledo” is one of those songs. It began as a passing thought while I was packing for a business trip to that city a couple months ago.  It seemed like an interesting sounding word combination so I wrote it down.

Then one evening I started singing the phrase while playing a guitar riff similar to “Sweet Home Alabama.”  Some mumbled lyrics during this take that I recorded yielded interesting results later on:

“Two nights in Toledo/could change a lucky man” later became “Two nights in Toledo/could make you a different man”.

The other phrases I sang didn’t actually say very much but they prompted some ideas based on the way they sounded and turned into “A good day in Las Vegas” and “Three Days in the Dakotas” and “Two weeks in Missoula”.

But what about two nights in Toledo? How could that make you a different man?

I had one idea–that travelling to small towns can lead to big changes.  Not bad, but it needed more to it.

So here’s the perspiration part, I guess.  I did research on Toledo (Ohio, not Spain) looking on Wikipedia for something interesting I could tie it to.  Here’s what I found aside from it being Maxwell Klinger’s home town in the series MASH and the namesake of the exclamation “Holy Toledo!”:

  • John Denver denigrated the city with the song “Saturday Night in Toledo” performed in 1967 on the Tonight Show, leading to a large public outcry at the time;  Oops.
  • the prog rock band Yes mentions the city in “Our Song” from the 1983 album 90125;
  • the city has hosted a baseball team dating back to 1896 called the Toledo Mudhens;
  • the Maumee River runs through the city, connecting it to Lake Erie;
  • and the inspiration for the 1970s song “Lucille” (sang of course by Kenny Rogers) is associated with the city;

And that’s where it got interesting.  Out of curiousity, I looked up the source to that last bit of trivia and discovered it mentioned in a March 22, 2010 story from the Toledo Blade newspaper about the recent closure of Caesar’s Show Bar, a historic location with a notable reputation as “the stiletto-heeled stomping grounds of local drag queen legends.”

The story says that although “it wasn’t the first drag bar in Toledo nor the only place with female impersonators, it was the best known and had the longest run, strutting through three decades of diva acts.”

Moreover, the story goes on to report that prior to its run as a drag bar, the location had previously been called the Country Palace bar and was where songwriter Hal Byman stopped in for a drink in the summer of 1975:

Mr. Bynum wandered across the street from the current Greyhound station at Michigan Street and Jefferson Avenue. Thirsty for beer, he stepped into the Country Palace bar that was then in the building.

As he sat at a corner table, Mr. Bynum said, he heard a conversation between a man and his estranged wife. There was an angry exchange, and the man got up and told the woman, “All I can say is, you picked a fine time to leave me.”

A song idea hit him, and Mr. Bynum grabbed a napkin and started scribbling words. With later help from Roger Bowling, the idea evolved into the 1977 chart-topping Kenny Rogers country song “Lucille.”

“In a bar in Toledo/ across from the depot/ on a bar stool, she took off her ring,” the lyrics begin.

Although I personally have no substantial connection to drag queens or divas, or Kenny Rogers for that matter, the Blade story did suggest to me how two nights in Toledo could make you a different man.  From there I’ll leave the rest up to the listener.

The point is this: that bit of informal research took the song into a direction that I could never have anticipated.  The original inspiration from a passing thought combined with some mumbled words sung during a writing session, came to fruition with patience and persistence, and a bit of perspiration.  The reward was a journey into a theme and set of lyrics that I had no idea was coming.  And yet it did.  This is for all you Toledoans.

The image “Eye on the prize” is by darwin Bell courtesy of Flickr Creative Commons.

Carry On

A few months back I wrote about using Flickr as a source of visual inspiration for songwriting. At the time, I was working with a line “She’s like a merry-go-round” and had some vague ideas about how the song might develop.  I continued with that initial theme of amusement park as a place to experience young love.

The final result is called “Carry On”.  I wrote about the title and the bridge to this song in another earlier post.  The original version was written for acoustic guitar with a much slower tempo in mind.  When working on the demo, I brought the tempo up to 124 bpm and added a more complex arrangement, including some vintage analog synth parts that seemed to complement the mood of the song.  Trumpeting the love, as it were.

The image is from a colour linocut by Cyril E. Power, called “The Merry-Go-Round” and posted on Flickr Creative Commons.

Meet me in Montreal

It’s interesting to see how an idea changes from one form into something completely different as it evolves in the writing process.  In this case, the song began with a guitar pattern that derived from another song called ‘February.’  I’d been listening to Iron and Wine quite a bit around this time and found myself mimicking the playing style of the beautifully subtle songs from the album Naked as We Came.

I was drawn to the mood of this pattern and spent a week or more trying to fit it to a lyric.  Somewhere along the line I hit upon an idea and dropped the pattern entirely, opting instead for a very simple chord progression using the G/C/Em forms.  I tend to play with a capo on the 2nd or 3rd frets, so the tuning in the recording will be a full tone up, which seems to suit my vocal range.

The lyric itself is inspired by a personal experience with a good friend who never made it to the end of his journey.  I had the good fortune to play it live with another friend at a recent reunion, where we performed it as a personal tribute.