SAC Challenge: “Choose” verse development

Okay, so “choice” is the unifying theme that I’ve decided to use for the song “Choose”.  The chorus lyrics were shared in a previous post and in my last post I wrote about unifying themes for songs that use simple titles.

Here’s what I’ve come up with so far with the verses and a pre-chorus included.  I chopped it into short phrases because I can hear the lines being sung quickly with a 1/16 note pickup on the opening lines followed by 1/8 note rhythm.   I’m a bit uncertain with the pre-chorus, even though I like the reference to a multiple choice test.  Here we go…

“Choose”

Verse

When it comes to music-
you have to
make a choice
do you want it
straight or swing
do you want to
dance or sing

When it comes to movies-
you have to
make a choice
do you want to
laugh or cry-
or do you wanna
real thrill ride

Prechorus

When it comes to a lover’s test-
it’s multiple choice
it’s your voice
so what’s it gonna be boy?
A, B, C, or D

Chorus

It’s time to choose me-
you don’t want to lose me
not this time around

Our love is strong-
but if you wait too long-
I’ll be gone before you know it

You can make your move-
you know I’ll approve
I’ll love you over and over again

I can’t wait forever-
to be together
you don’t want to lose me-
it’s time to choose.

Verse

When it comes to candy-
you have to
make a choice
do you like it
sour or sweet-
do you like to
trick or treat

When it comes to fashion-
you gotta
make a choice
do you go for
Calvin Klein
or any old design

Prechorus

When it comes to a lover’s test-
it’s multiple choice
it’s your voice
so what’s it gonna be boy?
A, B, C, or D

Chorus

 

 

 

 

SAC Challenge: finding a unifying theme for the song

In my last post I shared the chorus for a song called “Choose.”  One thing I admire about the pop formula is how songwriters will establish a unified theme around a simple concept and play with it in the verse development.

Echosmith’s “Bright” is a love song that uses astronomical imagery as a unifying theme:

Did you see that shooting star tonight?
Were you dazzled by the same constellation?
Did you and Jupiter conspire to get me?
I think you and the Moon and Neptune got it right
I think you and the Moon and Neptune got it right
I think you and the Moon and Neptune got it right
‘Cause now I’m shining bright, so bright
Bright, so bright
Bright, so bright
And I get lost in your eyes tonight

This kind of writing takes a simple, everyday word or cliche and puts a new spin on it.  I love the ingenuity in it.

So, for “Choose” I’m working on the idea of choice as a thematic motif.  I’ve started to develop some verse ideas. I’ll share them in my next post.

Working with a title

I’m playing with the phrase “Beautiful Freeze” as a possible title.  Check out this post on SAC about writing from titles.

I’ve done it before with my song “Two Nights in Toledo”, which I documented here in detail.  Maybe too much detail.

Anyway, what I love about titles is that they can go so many directions, especially if you resist the temptation to take the first idea that comes to mind.  Set that one aside and work to generate some other, less obvious themes.

I often search Flickr for visual images to help me imagine an idea.  Here’s something that comes up when I search for “Beautiful Freeze”

https://www.flickr.com/photos/26327184@N07/4492268156/in/photolist-9haCm8-9eBxpv-9hdvFU-9eBxpF-9eBxpB-7QUL6R-9hdvFG-9haCkP-4ED5rC-9haCke-9haCkv-9hdvFY-9haCkk-9eBxpM-9haCkV-9hdvFS-7QY2EQ-7QY3Pf-7QY4a3-7QULsR-pAsU8N-pSNbpg-acAunH-ndRTYm-4hDPgF-acAunt-ny2xPx-by2FzZ-9gw4e2-9fwCdr-k6FehL-dMDmEa-9pRMCk-9fwCPK-9fzKkA-dTUAhR-dmEuUb-5pzn1p-99nLPP-dYpByY-pJtycE-aNweDD-aNweDP-AGH4R-5Yx1G4-5RxQ3m-9fzEHw-iH33rb-5TWCYe-9fzDso

A moment frozen in time.  Both the photo and the ice can “freeze” a moment.  This makes me think about cameras and flashbulbs, strobes.  Maybe beautiful freeze is a moment on the dance floor when the girl (or boy) is “frozen” by the strobe light?  Captured for an instant in the midst of the music and the flow of everything.  You want to hold on to it, but it’s gone just as quick.

Maybe we have a premise for a song here… any takers?

 

 

 

Bumpercars!

Being a Mac user I had been tinkering with Garageband for a number of years before using it as a writing platform.  In early summer 2009, I used some of the canned content on Garageband to create a few fun songs for my young son to listen to while I was going to be away travelling on business.

One of these songs was inspired by an improvisation we did one day in the living room, riffing on the phrase “bumper cars”. This was then combined with a few personal references related to some casual trainspotting we used to do (“here we go down to shunty yard”) as well as thematic elements taken from the Pixar animated film Cars, which he was very much into at the time.  The music is an unaltered Garageband track but the words and vocals are mine.

Probably like a lot of other folks out there, Garageband has played an important role in (re)kindling my desire to create music.